Please provide feedback on my query letter.?

well let me start by saying that this is my first query letter I've ever read, and from what I've heard a query letter needs you seem to have it. it looks professional, but you might want to get more feed back k. just to double make sure nothing is wrong, I really hope you get published then I'll be able to say I gave advise to this author before she was published lol jk. good luck.